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( Ashes, part 6 )
1) So that's Morgalen. Next chapter, she gets to start explaining what she's doing so far from home -- and why she was traveling with a binder, when binders tend to have a lot of trouble being out in the tainted lands -- which means the plot is finally about to get going.
2) I think I went slightly overboard compensating for my previous failure at physical description. Oh well. When I edit in December, I will do my best to put little verbal sketches of Zalir, Tir, and Sular into the earlier sections, and try harder to define Riam's appearance through indirect means. (I refuse to resort to a scene where he looks at himself in a mirror, because no. Just no.)
3) Hello, random world-building! So now you have a bit more information about the miasma -- both its effects and its origins. I will actually be resorting to a more traditional infodump during Morgalen's tale, if only because she has to explain her plan to fix the world, which requires her to be very precise about the details of what went wrong. You also have a bit of implicit information about Morgalen's home; again that will come clearer over time as she talks more about her past and her family.
4) You know, I have utterly failed to explain what was up with the two people chasing Morgalen and Gydra -- somebody ought to have asked about them, or made sure that they were X kind of people instead of Y kind of people, or commented that their clothes or weapons or mounts or whatever marked them as such-and-such. Anything other than a complete non-reaction. Oops. I'll have to fix that in December.
5) 1,700 words today, 8,500 total.
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I'm feeling better than yesterday; sleep is remarkably good at shoving a mild cold back into the box of not-quite-sick.
Now I should go to bed in order to keep on the correct side of the line between illness and health. :-)
1) So that's Morgalen. Next chapter, she gets to start explaining what she's doing so far from home -- and why she was traveling with a binder, when binders tend to have a lot of trouble being out in the tainted lands -- which means the plot is finally about to get going.
2) I think I went slightly overboard compensating for my previous failure at physical description. Oh well. When I edit in December, I will do my best to put little verbal sketches of Zalir, Tir, and Sular into the earlier sections, and try harder to define Riam's appearance through indirect means. (I refuse to resort to a scene where he looks at himself in a mirror, because no. Just no.)
3) Hello, random world-building! So now you have a bit more information about the miasma -- both its effects and its origins. I will actually be resorting to a more traditional infodump during Morgalen's tale, if only because she has to explain her plan to fix the world, which requires her to be very precise about the details of what went wrong. You also have a bit of implicit information about Morgalen's home; again that will come clearer over time as she talks more about her past and her family.
4) You know, I have utterly failed to explain what was up with the two people chasing Morgalen and Gydra -- somebody ought to have asked about them, or made sure that they were X kind of people instead of Y kind of people, or commented that their clothes or weapons or mounts or whatever marked them as such-and-such. Anything other than a complete non-reaction. Oops. I'll have to fix that in December.
5) 1,700 words today, 8,500 total.
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I'm feeling better than yesterday; sleep is remarkably good at shoving a mild cold back into the box of not-quite-sick.
Now I should go to bed in order to keep on the correct side of the line between illness and health. :-)
